Written by the roadside on the back of an envelope
Spinning wheel
Spinning dreams
Blue in one light
Green in another
Shot silk
Wearing cobwebs of dreams
Trying to stay
Grounded
Clear
Listen to the head
Snip wings and... soar.
I accept
It does not matter
What you deny
Or how long it takes.
posted by Hashi @ 1:12 PM
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3 Comments:
This is a lovely poem -- especially, the imagery of 'cobwebs of dreams' is beautiful, and combines deftly with 'shot silk' from the previous line -- but I am puzzled by the line
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Snip wings and ... soar.
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Naturally one doesn't expect to snip wings and soar (a fact implicitly acknowledged, I think, by the ellipsis), so I fear I can't tease out the meaning of this line. (Does it refer to the end of a relationship?)
When I read this, I was convinced that a similar line had appeared in Moments, but I looked back and the closest thing I could find was
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What world taught us to douse fairy-lights?
I capture the body of a moment in words,
Like catching a butterfly and pinning it down.
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I think maybe it's the combination of the somewhat dispiriting idea of dousing fairy-lights (with which phrasing I know you were dissatisfied) with the image of a butterfly, hence of wings, which brought this comparison to mind. Anyway, I wonder if there actually was any commonality of thought here, or if I was just imagining it?
P.S. It was a pleasure to be present for the conception of this poem (even if you did claim that it was only the outline of a poem when I asked).
One can snip wings and soar when one is using something other than wings to soar. The ellipsis was just the pause needed to change a pre-established thought pattern. Not really a concious commonality with "Moments".
By the way, this wasn't the poem at whose conception you were present. I'll post that next. Upon re-reading, here is a distinct commonality there, though.
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